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Posts: 1255 · Last edited by JJ Weasley on January 8, 2008 4:22 pm; edited 3 times in total

Okay so, I've read most of the stories on here and i got enough courage to start writing my end. Now I d on't like reading those LONG ETERNAL posts so I'm going to post one small chapter at a time. However; this means if you follow the story you will have to check in more often. Critiquing is enjoyed and I hope you like my story.. . . .

Prologue: ~A New Task~

It was a dark and stormy night on the island. the rain dripped on the rocks outside of the cave and the water was slowly forming puddles in and outside.

"Well Lucius, it looks like your son didn't decide to show up," exclaimed the dark cold voice.
"But my lord," said Lucius, "I assure you I can-" but he was interrupted when Voldemort's heel collided with his forehead. "Don't delay me Lucius!! You are a mere pawn in the path of a King!" Lucius stumbled attempting to get up. Voldemort laughed and quicly attempted to yell, "Avada Kedav-" But didn't have enough time before a small hooded figure apparated near the edge of the cave. "What do you know," said voldemort, "Your son came through for you after all." Voldemort knocked LUcius over in another of Lucius's weak attempts to stand up.

"Dad!" yelled Draco, but Voldemort punched him in nose causing Draco to fall back several feet.
"Forget that man!" yelled Voldemort. Then he lowered his tone., "I have a task for you." Dracon whimpered slightly in the presence of Voldemort. "wha-wha-waht is it my lord?" Voldemort cackled annoyingly. "Isn't it obvious?? Bring me Potter!! No, beter yet just kill him! He's evaded me long enough but he will die soon." Draco wiped some blood from his nose. "DO YOU UNDERSTAND!?" Voldemort's voice echoed off the cave. Draco slowly looked down and stared into the small puddle of rain and blood below him. "yes. My lord."

Chapter 1 coming soon....
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i LIKE IT. Please write more
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Posts: 1255 · Posted: January 3, 2008 11:20 am Post subject:

thank you^^
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Posts: 1255 · Posted: January 3, 2008 6:10 pm Post subject:

Chapter 1 A Warning

Draco walked out of potions and stopped by the door slowly backing up. The three students left in the classroom were Hermione, Harry, and Ron. Hermione and Ron walked out of the classroom when Ron suddenly tripped and dropped his books. Hermione and harry scurried past him and said quickly.

"Sorry Ron! We have to study for the tests!" Ron sighed and began picking up his books. Nows my time to attack him thought Draco. He leaned over and picked Ron up by the collar once Hermione had left the corridor.

"Hello Weasley." said Malfoy evily.

"Put me down you bloody Slytherin!" he said angrily. Draco laughed and said, "Watch out for me Weasley. I'm comin' after you and your little gang too. And if I find out you tell anyone about this I'll take out your entire blood traitor family!" Ron whipered slightly but then drew up a large fist and whacked Malfoy in between the eyes. Malfoy dropped Ron as he fell to the ground unconscious. Ron looked over Draco's body suprisingly. Then he scrambled to pick up his books and ran to the Gryffindor common room panting all the way.

I will add more later but first I want to get an idea of what you people think.
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Posts: 1980 · Posted: January 4, 2008 12:46 am Post subject:

Do hurry. I hate it when there's a story untold. That's probaly why I drive myself crazy. I never finish my own stories. Ha. Crying

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Posts: 655 · Posted: January 4, 2008 5:14 am Post subject:

nice,you could be a writer
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Posts: 1255 · Posted: January 4, 2008 6:58 pm Post subject:

^^Thank you
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Posts: 1255 · Posted: January 4, 2008 7:06 pm Post subject:

Malfoy awoke in the hospital wing with perfectly clear memory of what had happened. "WEASLEY!" He screamed. Madam Pomfrey looked up from here paperwork.

"Oh dear your awake. What on earth happened to you?" she asked as though she was pretending to care. "Weasley happened to me!" he replied angrily.
"Dear, calm down. Explain exactly what happened." She said calmly. Malfoy looked around realizing he would get in trouble if he told her the truth. He shrugged and said," Weasley tripped on top of me and I hit my head on the ground thats all." Madam Pomfrey looked at him suspiciously considering the imrint of a fist on his forehead and got back to work.

"Oh by the way deary," said Madam Pomfrey, "There is a copy of the prophet next to you." Malfoy realized he was in a bed and struggled to get the Daily Prophet copy next to him. It took him half a second to react to the headline of the news.

Lucius and Narcissa Malfoy Found Dead

His eyes immediately swelled with tears. "Somehow Potter is behind this!" he thohgt. Now his revenge had a meaning.[/b]
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Posts: 1255 · Posted: January 8, 2008 4:22 pm Post subject:

Chapter 2 Some Potions Help

Snape looked up from his desk. His latest conversation with the Dark lord had left him tired. "How am I going to help Malfoy?" he thought, "And will he abandon the situation if he figures out Voldemort killed his parents?" He stumbled upon these questions when he heard A quiet knock on the door.

"Come in!" he said abruptly. Draco Malfoy walked in with puffy red eyes and his wand in hand. Snape looked at him, "What is it boy?" he asked. Malfoy looked up from the ground slowly.

"How did my parents die Professor?" he said innocently. Snpae pretended to look confused. "What do you mean? I have no idea-" but Malfoy cut him off. "I know you know!!" he yelled angrily. Snape sighed, he couldn't hide the truth forever. "Your parents," Snape began, "Refused to leave you and go onto a long mission which I am resrticted to tell you about. In his rage Voldemort killed your parents." Malfoy looked back down at the ground almost immediately. Draco finally spoke, "So-so- Potter didn't do anything?" Snape almost laughed "No dear boy. But I know of your task and I have been instructed to watch over you during this task. Are you aware of when your parents funeral will occur?" the reply came quietly, "Yes sir" Snape looked Draco in the eye. "That, is when we will strike."

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sounds good so far
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i like it but what happened to harry when ron hit draco he just seemed to have dissapeared
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Posts: 4979 · Posted: March 16, 2008 7:45 pm Post subject:

pretty cool
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Posts: 1255 · Posted: May 24, 2008 9:31 am Post subject:

Okay I fixed the part when Harry "dissapeared" If anyone still likes this post. If I get 3 encouraging posts I will continue the story
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