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rainloversdawn
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 Posted: December 31, 2008 1:35 am Post subject: My Thoughts Out Loud (My Poetry) |
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So I decied to post my poetry. Please let me know what you think of them. 
Those Pipes are the Only Reason I'm Still Breathing
Sing me to sleep every night
Be my inspiration, my muse
And I know you probably have someone
But I just thought you should know
Every moment of the day
I think about what you may be doing
And I know that you don’t even realize I exist
But that’s ok
Cause in my mind you belong with me
We are Bonnie and Clyde
He can’t hold a candle to you
That voice and those beautiful eyes
I know the thoughts are his
But they sound so much better coming from your lips
You’re like a razorblade to the wrist
It feels good for a second
And then you know you’ll never, ever be the same again
Head-On Collision
Seeking eternal glory
Where is the sacrifice
You can’t have everything without giving something back
You can’t change the world without taking a chance
We all know you can do no wrong
We all know you’re infallible
And when the time comes you won’t take the fall
So blame, blame, blame it on everyone else
You’re a car wreak
Everybody loves to stop and stare
And then they just walk on by
I’ll take a page from your book
And send it to hell with you
See me with a Joker’s smile
Here comes the end of your façade
Your reign
You can’t have everything without giving something back
You can’t change the world without taking a chance
These two are my most recent.
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PinkPancake
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| Posted: December 31, 2008 2:45 am Post subject: |
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wow deep. I dont really understand the meaning in poerty cuz im really dumb but yeh its deep.
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Jayfer
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| Posted: December 31, 2008 4:09 pm Post subject: |
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Wow! You are excellent at writing poetry. I've read through those two poem twice and just...WOW. I caught glimpses of what you are getting at in both poems, and they just so deep... My hat's off to you girl!
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rainloversdawn
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| Posted: December 31, 2008 9:08 pm Post subject: |
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| Jayfer wrote: |
| Wow! You are excellent at writing poetry. I've read through those two poem twice and just...WOW. I caught glimpses of what you are getting at in both poems, and they just so deep... My hat's off to you girl! |
Thank you! I've got a couple of old ones that I can post, but as for new ones I'm not feeling particularly inspired at the moment. But sometimes the littlest things will inspire me. 
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Jayfer
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| Posted: January 1, 2009 2:40 pm Post subject: |
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I've not written much poetry, just a few things.
When I look back to those times when I have written poetry, there is usually a really big momentous event that has taken place.
Isn't it just wonderful that different things inspire people in different ways. It blows my mind sometimes.
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Hermione999
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| Posted: January 1, 2009 6:52 pm Post subject: |
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Great! I love it! Fantastic!
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rainloversdawn
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| Posted: January 5, 2009 2:37 am Post subject: |
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| Hermione999 wrote: |
| Great! I love it! Fantastic! |
Thank you so much! Well I was feeling a little inspired this weekend and this is what I came up with... (and no it is not from personal experience, it is about a friend of mine)
I Have a Name, And it Isn’t Naive
I know what you’re doing
I can’t say that it doesn’t bother me
I wonder if you thought I wouldn’t notice
Her name is always on your lips
Yet you tell me she is with someone else
Do you think he knows?
You were careless
You left something behind
Did you think I wouldn’t find it
I will always come back
You are like a bad habit
I can’t get enough
Just remember one thing
You can’t hide anything from me
I will always find you out
I know what you’re doing
I can’t say that it doesn’t bother me
But I will pretend that I don’t notice
This one is a little older, but I figured I would post it for some feedback.
Letting Go
Step back, take back everything you said
Do this, do that, no (no)
Not your words, I can’t hear myself think, can’t be
Oh, and the orders dance in my head
I’m turning my life around, making a change
I’m not going to be your stepping stone
Doormat
I’m going to be (going to be me)
Baby, I’m letting go
I’m not that witty, but baby
I can outsmart, outthink you
I am the queen of sarcasm
I love the look on your face as my words
Fly over your head
I’m turning my life around, making a change
I’m not going to be your stepping stone
Doormat
I’m going to be me (going to be me)
Baby, I’m letting go
What about what I want
It’s not all about you
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Ironman616
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| Posted: January 8, 2009 7:46 am Post subject: |
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It's Just like i imagined it,And yet,it's nothing like i imagined it at all(In all the Right ways!)   
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rainloversdawn
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| Posted: January 8, 2009 7:47 am Post subject: |
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| Ironman616 wrote: |
| It's Just like i imagined it,And yet,it's nothing like i imagined it at all(In all the Right ways!) |
Ummmm exactly what did you imagine?
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Ironman616
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| Posted: January 8, 2009 7:51 am Post subject: |
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| rainloversdawn wrote: |
| Ironman616 wrote: |
| It's Just like i imagined it,And yet,it's nothing like i imagined it at all(In all the Right ways!) |
Ummmm exactly what did you imagine? |
I have no idea what-so-ever,apart from something inspirational,which might hint at the Things that could happen to my dudes at the roleplaying forums,as well as matters of What i must do with my life! 
In which case,your poems are Everything,and yet nothing,like i imagined at all!
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Jayfer
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| Posted: January 8, 2009 5:09 pm Post subject: |
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| rainloversdawn wrote: |
I Have a Name, And it Isn’t Naive
I know what you’re doing
I can’t say that it doesn’t bother me
I wonder if you thought I wouldn’t notice
Her name is always on your lips
Yet you tell me she is with someone else
Do you think he knows?
You were careless
You left something behind
Did you think I wouldn’t find it
I will always come back
You are like a bad habit
I can’t get enough
Just remember one thing
You can’t hide anything from me
I will always find you out
I know what you’re doing
I can’t say that it doesn’t bother me
But I will pretend that I don’t notice
This one is a little older, but I figured I would post it for some feedback.
Letting Go
Step back, take back everything you said
Do this, do that, no (no)
Not your words, I can’t hear myself think, can’t be
Oh, and the orders dance in my head
I’m turning my life around, making a change
I’m not going to be your stepping stone
Doormat
I’m going to be (going to be me)
Baby, I’m letting go
I’m not that witty, but baby
I can outsmart, outthink you
I am the queen of sarcasm
I love the look on your face as my words
Fly over your head
I’m turning my life around, making a change
I’m not going to be your stepping stone
Doormat
I’m going to be me (going to be me)
Baby, I’m letting go
What about what I want
It’s not all about you |
I absolutely love both of these poems. I can think of quite a few peoples' names I can plug into both poems. Heh heh.
I love these types of poems. Shows 'em who's boss now, don't they!!! You go girl! Keep it up.
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rainloversdawn
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| Posted: January 9, 2009 3:46 am Post subject: |
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| Jayfer wrote: |
I absolutely love both of these poems. I can think of quite a few peoples' names I can plug into both poems. Heh heh.
I love these types of poems. Shows 'em who's boss now, don't they!!! You go girl! Keep it up. |
Thanks!
Well here is a new one..... don't really know what to call it though.
You were my best friend
I told you all my secrets
and I knew all of yours
somewhere along the way
I fell for you
Dance with me when I'm all alone
Hold me when I cry over you
Even when you don't realize
Play my favorite song on
the worst day of my life and make it better
This is the only thing
I ever kept from you
and when you found out
you looked at me and smiled
"I'm sorry. Only a friend."
You broke my heart
But you were still the one to pick up the pieces
Over the years we lost touch
There is only one thing I want to know
Why couldn't you love me too?
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