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Messr. Padfoot


Joined: Jun 30, 2007
Location: Colorado
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Posted: July 16, 2008 8:29 pm Post subject: Albus Potter and the Remnants of Darkness |
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Prologue
The scar had not pained Harry for nineteen years. All was well.
Or was it?
Chapter One
One Year Later
Silence rang through the mists of a bog in the middle of the country not far from Little Hangleton. Cradled in the hills it was protected from wind and public view. Not many knew about the cemetary in the hills in Little Hangleton, those who did just thought it had been there forever.
But it they had taken a closer look they would have seen a newly built black mausoleum surrounded by gravemarkers. Some names that could be seen there were Lestrange, Pettigrew, Dolohov, Yaxley, and some that can't be read anymore. The only odd thing was the black mausoleum. The cemetary itself was twenty years old, but the mausoleum looks as if it were built just the other day.
On a warm July night, all was the same as it had ever been for twenty years. At 11:57 pm a loud pop struck from the hills. At 11:58 pm some inhabitants of Little Hangleton who happened to be up at the time swore to have seen two sequential green flashes of light with less than a second between. At 12:00 am a last green flash was seen and later on another pop.
If one were to have seen the events going on in the cemetary, they would have seen a dark man appear suddenly with a crack next to the gate where two figures stood on either side. They would have seen that the dark man had a stick in his hand and the other two were attempting to pull their sticks out. Before they could the dark man pointed to each of the men in turn and a green flash of light hit both of them in less than a second. The dark man pushed open the gate and walked up to the black mausoleum. With the stick still in his hand he pointed it to the door of the mausoleum and was hurled in the air back ten feet. The dark man stumbled back up and pointed his wand at the door again and next a green flash of light hit it. The door slowly opened.
The dark man walked into the mausoleum and came back with what appeared to be an urn and before you know it, with another crack he was gone. Many miles away in the neighborhood of Godric's Hollow a 12-year-old boy in his bed opened his green eyes with a start with a pain in his forehead. _________________
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Umberto

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Posted: July 16, 2008 10:36 pm Post subject: |
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Not bad, not bad at all. I hope to see a second chapter. _________________ I'M NOT AN OWL ~ Hermione
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The Chickmagnet


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Posted: July 17, 2008 12:19 am Post subject: |
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Pretty good! Looking forward to read second part  _________________
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Adam


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Posted: July 17, 2008 12:36 am Post subject: |
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| I don't read Fan Fiction at all, but this is really good. I liked it! |
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Jayfer


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Posted: July 17, 2008 7:13 am Post subject: |
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This is a great beginning to your story. I can't wait to read more, I'm very interested in what will happen next. _________________

If you miss , the story continues in "I Will" over in Flourish & Blotts. Updated August 25th. |
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hpgeek1334


Joined: May 29, 2008
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Posted: July 17, 2008 11:03 am Post subject: |
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GOOD JOB!!!!!! _________________
Why did you people get me into Twilight?
I LOVE ALI AND I DON'T CARE WHO KNOWS IT! |
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pottergirl66


Joined: Mar 1, 2008
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Posted: July 17, 2008 11:20 am Post subject: |
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verry good! _________________
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Isabelle Lestrange


Joined: Jan 24, 2008
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Posted: July 17, 2008 4:17 pm Post subject: |
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This beginning is a great way to start off the story! _________________
I ♥ you sweettahsin! |
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