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PK2007
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lol i forgot the 's'. i should proofread more carefully.
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Jayfer
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| Posted: July 18, 2008 10:56 am Post subject: |
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Good work and I like how this story is developing. I liked how you wrote paragraphs explaining things, moreso than just using dialogue. I'm really looking forward to reading more and finding out how Hermione handles Harry's infatuation of her.
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PK2007
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| Posted: July 20, 2008 12:10 pm Post subject: |
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hey guys. i havent been on for a couple of days cause ive had guests in my house. ill be able to post more by tomorrow when they leave.
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PK2007
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| Posted: July 22, 2008 9:58 am Post subject: |
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i know im not allowed to double- post but this is kinda bad news. im sorta grounded now so i cant post for a while. if im lucky i might find some oppurtunites to post. hope to update this soon.
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pottergirl66
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| Posted: July 22, 2008 2:35 pm Post subject: |
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well, hurry up and get un grounded lol
(and use the edit button)
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| Posted: July 27, 2008 1:33 pm Post subject: |
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this is the greatest fanfic you have ever read is it not?
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| Posted: July 27, 2008 8:40 pm Post subject: |
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Heh, this is awsome! I'm in love with your writing style!
**Dang man, I hate being grounded. Ah well I'm patient.
Nevermind! Get un-grounded! NOW! 
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Jayfer
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| Posted: July 28, 2008 2:19 pm Post subject: |
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Miss you PK. Hope you're back soon!
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PK2007
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| Posted: July 31, 2008 7:18 pm Post subject: |
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hey, guys. long time no see. unfortunately, im still grounded, but my parents forgot to the lock the computer before they left for work so i got some time to type this up, hope u like it. maybe they will forget again and i can post sooner 
The castle was now visible through the windows of the Hogwarts Express. Draco watched them through his window as he changed into his school robes. His compartment was empty expect for him and his school trunk. None of his friends had come back to Hogwarts, why would they anyways ? The question was, why would Draco Malfoy return to Hogwarts. Draco Malfoy had no one left in his life anymore. His parents were in Azkaban and he had no friends anymore. At least there would be people in Hogwarts, at least he wont feel as lonely as he would have in his father's manor.
The students stepped out of the Hogwarts Express. Harry walked up to the familiar carriages that were pulled by Threstrals. He went up to one of the Threstals and gently patted its side. His mind was still in Hermione. He was feeling a strong desire to cheat on Ginny and Ron's trust, and love Hermione in private. However, he knew it would be wrong and he knew he shouldn't do such a thing. He continued petting the Threstal absentmindedly until Ginny grabbed him by the arm and walked him into the last carriage, which was empty.
"Where's Hermione" Harry asks looking around, "and Ron" he adds hastily seeing the look in Ginny's eyes.
"They went ahead" she says, eying him suspiciously as they sat down in to the carriage. No one else was in there, Ginny sat herself across Harry.
Ginny looked Harry into Harry's eyes and took his hand into hers.
"Harry" Ginny whispered as the carriage started moving towards the castle.
"Yeah" Harry answered looking down at his lap.
"We haven't had time to be alone so much" Ginny said gently. Harry didn't answer. He really had lost his interest in Ginny.
"So, why don't you give me a small kiss. Please" Ginny added.
Harry looked up. He really didn't feel like kissing Ginny anymore. He felt that his lips were made for kissing Hermione's lips,but still, he leaned over and gave Ginny a small kiss. As he tried to pull away, Ginny grabbed him and they continued kissing. Harry, feeling slightly annoyed at this, pulled away and started looking out the window. He couldn't see the look in Ginny's face, but he knew he had disappointed her. Ginny and Harry rode the carriage to the castle in silence.
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pottergirl66
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| Posted: August 3, 2008 4:42 pm Post subject: |
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awsome awsome awsome!!!!!!!!!! i think i'm in love with your stories lol
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Jayfer
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| Posted: August 5, 2008 9:47 am Post subject: |
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I am really loving how your story is developing. And I am hoping to read more soon.
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PK2007
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| Posted: August 5, 2008 4:13 pm Post subject: |
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thanks for all the comments and suggestions guys. here's more. hope u like it.
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Draco stared at his empty golden plate as the students filed int i the Great Hall. He was feeling really lonely because none of his close friends had returned to Hogwarts. He could here people whispering things about him.
"The blond one"
"He's the son of Death Eater"
"He's responsible for Dumbledore's death"
The statements made Draco very angry and very sad. He could feel himself shaking as he clenched the front of the bench with his hands between his legs. His face was beginning to feel hot. Then suddenly the Great Hall broke into applause. Rows of people were standing up to applaud the four people who were just walking into the Hall. Draco stood up slowly to see the newcomers. They were Ron, Hermione, Harry, Ginny. Hermione was looking around the Hall, beaming. Her eyes met Draco's. Draco suddenly felt warm. His anger vanished on the spot and he stopped shaking. It was like her eyes were calming him down. She looked away almost immediately and turned to walk with the others towards the Gryffindor Table. Draco sat down, his mind was racing. What the hell just happened, he asked himself.
"Welcome to another year in Hogwarts" McGonnagal's sharp voice said, silencing the talking crowd.
Everyone looked up at her. Draco noticed quite a few changes to the staff. Snape's seat was occupied by Slughorn. There were a few new teachers as well. The former teacher for Muggle Studies had not returned after the Carrows had gone to Azkaban.
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A few weeks had passed ever since the first day of term and Hermione found herself on top of one of the towers of Hogwarts looking at the night sky. She got the habit of coming up here once in a while to do her homework alone. She found it relaxing and peaceful. Everything was actually normal for once. No Dark Wizards, no deaths, no worries ( expect the NEWTS). There was a only a little thing that was poking into Hermione's thoughts every now and then. That little thing was Harry Potter. Hermione seemed to be the only one to know that Harry and Ginny weren't behaving the same around each other. They don't spend much time together and when they are with each other they seem to be nervous. Although they haven't broken up yet, Hermione was sure their relationship was over. Thats the thought that sent shivers through her spine. If Harry leaves Ginny, the reason would be to come after Hermione. Hermione could feel Harry's eyes on her almost all the time. Whenever she and Ron tried to get a little private time, Harry almost always seemed to show up.
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Ron and Harry were making their way to the Gryffindor Common Room. They both stopped in front of the Fat Lady.
"I think Hermione's hanging out on one of the towers again" Ron said to Harry, "I'm gonna go look for her. See you later", Ron added. With that statement, he turned around and exited the corridor. Harry looked after him. He told the Fat Lady the password and ran into the common room. He climbed the steps to the dorm in full speed to retrieve his Invisibility Cloak.
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Ron was climbing the steps of the Astronomy Tower. He was hoping to surprise Hermione by sneaking up behind her. He reached the top of the steps and wasn't surprised to see the door open. Hermione was
right their leaning against the tower and looking up at the sky. Ron quietly stepped right behind her and grabbed her waist. Hermione was so surprised that she turned around and landed a slap right on Ron's cheek. Ron stumbled backwards.
"What was that for" he asked her laughing as he stood up again.
"I'm so sorry" Hermione said sarcastically as she turned her back at him again, grinning.
Ron came up behind her and hugged her from the back and started landing kisses on her neck.Ron knew that times like this were rare and he wanted to enjoy every minute of it. Hermione let him for a moment before she turned around and hugged him as well looking him at the eyes. Ron felt warm in her arms. He could see his own reflection on her eyes. He slowly placed his hand against her neck. He could feel Hermione's pulse through his hand which was beating fast and hard. She was slowly bringing her face close to his. Ron did the same to her and their lips met. He could feel Hermione's pulse beat faster as he kissed her. It was a beautiful moment for both them. However, they didn't know they were being watched.
Harry was on the same tower a few feet away under his invisibility cloak. He was starting to feel hopeless. How could he get to Hermione if Ron and Hermione loved each other so much. He continued watching the scene. Harry had become a stalker.
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pottergirl66
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this is soooooo freaking awsome!!! i love it
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PK2007
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| Posted: August 5, 2008 8:34 pm Post subject: |
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thank u very much, hope u liked it.
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hey, guys. long time no see. unfortunately, im still grounded, but my parents forgot to the lock the computer before they left for work so i got some time to type this up, hope u like it. maybe they will forget again and i can post sooner
The castle was now visible through the windows of the Hogwarts Express. Draco watched them through his window as he changed into his school robes. His compartment was empty expect for him and his school trunk. None of his friends had come back to Hogwarts, why would they anyways ? The question was, why would Draco Malfoy return to Hogwarts. Draco Malfoy had no one left in his life anymore. His parents were in Azkaban and he had no friends anymore. At least there would be people in Hogwarts, at least he wont feel as lonely as he would have in his father's manor.
The students stepped out of the Hogwarts Express. Harry walked up to the familiar carriages that were pulled by Threstrals. He went up to one of the Threstals and gently patted its side. His mind was still in Hermione. He was feeling a strong desire to cheat on Ginny and Ron's trust, and love Hermione in private. However, he knew it would be wrong and he knew he shouldn't do such a thing. He continued petting the Threstal absentmindedly until Ginny grabbed him by the arm and walked him into the last carriage, which was empty.
"Where's Hermione" Harry asks looking around, "and Ron" he adds hastily seeing the look in Ginny's eyes.
"They went ahead" she says, eying him suspiciously as they sat down in to the carriage. No one else was in there, Ginny sat herself across Harry.
Ginny looked Harry into Harry's eyes and took his hand into hers.
"Harry" Ginny whispered as the carriage started moving towards the castle.
"Yeah" Harry answered looking down at his lap.
"We haven't had time to be alone so much" Ginny said gently. Harry didn't answer. He really had lost his interest in Ginny.
"So, why don't you give me a small kiss. Please" Ginny added.
Harry looked up. He really didn't feel like kissing Ginny anymore. He felt that his lips were made for kissing Hermione's lips,but still, he leaned over and gave Ginny a small kiss. As he tried to pull away, Ginny grabbed him and they continued kissing. Harry, feeling slightly annoyed at this, pulled away and started looking out the window. He couldn't see the look in Ginny's face, but he knew he had disappointed her. Ginny and Harry rode the carriage to the castle in silence. |
aww just what a H/Hr shipper wants.
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| Posted: August 6, 2008 7:28 am Post subject: |
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I'm lovin' it PK. I'm really trying to guess what's going to happen since Hermione and Ron love each other so much. Can't wait to read more.
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PK2007
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| Posted: August 6, 2008 10:21 am Post subject: |
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thank u all. if any of u guys have any suggestions to make my writhing style better, please tell me. 
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pottergirl66
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| Posted: August 6, 2008 10:28 am Post subject: |
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how could you make perfection better?
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| Posted: August 12, 2008 1:40 pm Post subject: |
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PK2007, I need writing lessons from you...  I'm really impressed...
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PK2007
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| Posted: August 12, 2008 2:57 pm Post subject: |
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thankya, thankya very much
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| Posted: August 12, 2008 3:39 pm Post subject: |
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You have potential, that's for sure. 
I would enjoy the fanfic if I didn't loathe anything that was slightly beyond what the books write, and H/Hr shipping is my most traumatic experience throughout my long-way affection for the series. I would seriously love to see your skills being placed on a fanfic focalising on Draco and his actual wife in the series, someone named, according to the wikipedia, Astoria Greengrass? Or maybe even some fiery Ginny/Harry thing. ^_^
Again, no offence. Alas, you are quite talented - I just don't like the entire non-canon thing. ^_^
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PK2007
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| Posted: August 12, 2008 3:41 pm Post subject: |
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| Evil Love Is Stronger wrote: |
You have potential, that's for sure.
I would enjoy the fanfic if I didn't loathe anything that was slightly beyond what the books write, and H/Hr shipping is my most traumatic experience throughout my long-way affection for the series. I would seriously love to see your skills being placed on a fanfic focalising on Draco and his actual wife in the series, someone named, according to the wikipedia, Astoria Greengrass? Or maybe even some fiery Ginny/Harry thing. ^_^
Again, no offence. Alas, you are quite talented - I just don't like the entire non-c | | |
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